{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"30278221","dateCreated":"1289916645","smartDate":"Nov 16, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"NeriK1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/NeriK1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/willysroom.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/30278221"},"dateDigested":1532173567,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"body art","description":"Art has always been a great way to express one\u2019s feelings, points of view or just anything that goes through our mind. We have drawings, paintings, even graffitti that shows different opinions around the world. Nothing compares to our latest trend however; body art. This refers to piercings and ink that goes in ones body to show the rest of the world what you\u2019re all about. The legal age is supposed to be 18 and older, yet this is not followed. Lately teens are already inked by the age of 15, a big problem","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"30195973","dateCreated":"1289829764","smartDate":"Nov 15, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"klickim","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/klickim","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1288789817\/klickim-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/willysroom.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/30195973"},"dateDigested":1532173567,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"poor spending ","description":"In the past 100 years we as Americans have gradually become more and more dependant on oil and fossil fuels. Without thinking of the consequences we have guzzled up more and more of it each day, we have been consuming a resource that we know we cant replace carelessly without much thought on a better alternative fuel, not only are we relying on non renewable resources but we have also been destroying our earth while we were doing it. Much like our gasoline issue, we as Americans have been wasting our money. We have been investing our money into the wrong things, spending more than we are making and are overall stupid when it comes to anything financial. This is reflected in the current economic status of America.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"29880799","dateCreated":"1289310157","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Chicaizaj","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Chicaizaj","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/willysroom.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/29880799"},"dateDigested":1532173568,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Aggressive","description":" There many ways aggressive can play in a family household. It could be the parents being aggressive towards their children or, it could be children being aggressive towards their parents. There have been an increasing number of parents that are being attacked by their kids. About 22,537 calls in the last two years have been made to Parentline Plus. With most of them being from verbal aggressive. The suvery that the parents take from the parentline plus has said: 70% of the time their child was aggressive everyday. 47% destroy property, 42% hurt their parents physically or mentally. Many families don\u2019t know how to control their aggressiveness towards others in there families.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"29881619","body":""it is estimated that 22,537 calls have been receive to Parentline Plus in the last two years, most of them due to the verbal aggresion. A survery conducted by PArentline Plus showed that ...... (you should add more detail to your intro. Add an attention getter add more detail talk more about what you are going to write about)","dateCreated":"1289310914","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Pinedac21","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Pinedac21","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"29881635","body":"I would try using better transition words, and check for spelling errors.
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\nSo whats the problem; parenting skills or children's disobedience ?","dateCreated":"1289310923","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"NeriK1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/NeriK1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"29871043","dateCreated":"1289279859","smartDate":"Nov 8, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Cardenasa5","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Cardenasa5","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1288703891\/Cardenasa5-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/willysroom.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/29871043"},"dateDigested":1532173568,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Technology","description":"Ever Since the emergence of the human species, our strive for success in innovation has fulfilled our needs and wants. From the discovery of fire to the industrial revolution, technological advances have made life less of a hassle. The whole aspect of innovation has made our demands for wants higher. We as a society today, use technology to accommodate our personal needs. For the most part, our reliance on technology has taken our place of our lives. The faulty use of technology has affected our attention spans, and the social aspects of life.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"29882197","body":"this is pretty good, it's not too long, but not too short either. you might want to give one or 2 specific examples about what that faulty use is, or use a connection to make it more relate able for the reader.","dateCreated":"1289311426","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Serranoo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Serranoo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1288834578\/Serranoo-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"29883321","body":"Improve word choice. Eating raw meat was more than a hassle. Also, you have an economic themed intro, perhaps use economic vocabulary throughout to reinforce that theme.","dateCreated":"1289312465","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"thewillhoit","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/thewillhoit","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1225730551\/thewillhoit-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"29870693","dateCreated":"1289278810","smartDate":"Nov 8, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Serranoo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Serranoo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1288834578\/Serranoo-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/willysroom.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/29870693"},"dateDigested":1532173568,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Oskar.","description":"[[0033CC="php"]]
\nSome personality traits are easier to spot than others, some can be noticed within the first few seconds of meeting person, others might take a couple of months getting of getting to know a person for them to reveal themselves. Some traits like leadership, jealousy, and anger are usually those that can be noticed within the few seconds of meeting someone new because they are more easily self-regulated. Others like Procrastination are less easily self-regulated, and without that control the trait can spiral out of control and negative effect the lives of the people who don\u2019t have that control.<\/strong> 0033CC<\/a>","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"29870723","body":"ignore the 0033CC things.","dateCreated":"1289278887","smartDate":"Nov 8, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Serranoo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Serranoo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1288834578\/Serranoo-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"29880801","body":"In the first sentence it should "Meeting A Person" and also take out the word "Getting" from the first sentence.
\nYou should just say "Traits" instead of "Some Traits"
\nIn thesis the first part could be re-worded and "Negative" should be changed to "negatively"
\nOverall, it was a good idea and it looks like you can write a lot about your topic","dateCreated":"1289310158","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"RobertsA33","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/RobertsA33","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"29881061","body":"Some is used a little heavily
\ntransition is a little choppy
\nconsider adding a story or anecdote to catch readers attention.
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\ntranscendentalist line is good, fits with the intro","dateCreated":"1289310426","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"iandjohnson","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/iandjohnson","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1288788677\/iandjohnson-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"29870595","dateCreated":"1289278605","smartDate":"Nov 8, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"KotesovM272","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KotesovM272","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/willysroom.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/29870595"},"dateDigested":1532173568,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Michael Koteosv","description":"Eating 3 meals as day as a family is an American Issue
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\nFamilies do not take the time to sit down as a family unit to eat 3 meals together. However, I struggle with this issue myself. My own family is an example of this current American family issue. My parents are not home during the meal times, with that not allowing us to eat together, often during weekdays. Eating meals together is a positive experience for a family to stay connected to each other. Family talk time may involve expressing each other\u2019s concerns, needs, and interests. Eating is one of life\u2019s most available pleasures. It is even more satisfying when it is shared.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"29881115","body":"What are some other ways that can be substituted into family time instead of dinner? How has this affected you, and your family?","dateCreated":"1289310471","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"kapilp17","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/kapilp17","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"29883077","body":"Families do not take the time to sit down as a family unit to eat 3 meals together. However, I struggle with this issue myself. My own family is an example of this current American family issue. My parents are not home during the meal times, with that not allowing us to eat together, often during weekdays. We never eat breakfast or dinners with an exception of school were we eat lunch. My sister and I would get around the table during dinner and eat together. Eating meals together is a positive experience for a family to stay connected to each other. Family talk time may involve expressing each other\u2019s concerns, needs, and interests. Eating is one of life\u2019s most available pleasures. It is even more satisfying when it is shared.","dateCreated":"1289312185","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"KotesovM272","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KotesovM272","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"29870433","dateCreated":"1289278310","smartDate":"Nov 8, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"mturnertheburner","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mturnertheburner","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/willysroom.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/29870433"},"dateDigested":1532173569,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Michael Turner- Unhealthy Eating Habits","description":"American society in today's world heavily relies on fast food, snacks such as chips, cookies, sodas, and coffee. In the past, a person would have to forage or hunt for their meals, there was no such thing as a precooked meal or just going to the closest McDonald's down the street. In today\u2019s society we expect every thing to be handed to us on a silver platter. Today, we try to make every little aspect of our lives to be as simple as possible so that there is less and less work to do. This includes cooking, instead of going home and making a healthy meal, for the sake of simplicity and time, a person will be inclined to go to a fast food restaurant and order a meal and have it within a few minutes.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"29881391","body":"It feels a little repetitive, try to mix things up an add a little facts in your writing","dateCreated":"1289310717","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"ShannonH.","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/ShannonH.","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1314630902\/ShannonH.-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"29881803","body":"In the sentence "Today, we try to make every little aspect of our lives" it would be better to join that sentence to the previous one, and omit the Today bu=y replacing it with a conjunction.","dateCreated":"1289311092","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Serranoo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Serranoo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1288834578\/Serranoo-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"30195551","body":"American society in today's world heavily relies on fast food, snacks such as chips, cookies, sodas, and coffee. In the past, a person would have to forage or hunt for their meals, there was no such thing as a precooked meal or just going to the closest McDonald's down the street. In today\u2019s society we expect every thing to be handed to us on a silver platter. Not only do we expect for things to be served on a silver platter American society tries to make every little aspect of our lives to be as simple as possible so that there is less and less work to do. These aspects would include cooking, instead of going home and making a healthy meal, for the sake of simplicity and time, a person will be inclined to go to a fast food restaurant and order a meal and have it within a few minutes.","dateCreated":"1289829293","smartDate":"Nov 15, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"mturnertheburner","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/mturnertheburner","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"29869639","dateCreated":"1289276467","smartDate":"Nov 8, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"ShannonH.","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/ShannonH.","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1314630902\/ShannonH.-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/willysroom.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/29869639"},"dateDigested":1532173569,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Sibling Rivalry","description":"Remember those arguments that you probably had just last week with your younger or older siblings? Sibling rivalry is very common no matter the age. Most of the time it starts when a second child is born into the family an all the thunder is stolen from the eldest child. Which forces the eldest to get into a mind set that they have to fight for their rightful spot that they once owned. But studies from CBS state that,"It's okay for children to `feel' jealousy, envy and other emotions." As long as they can stay in control of them. Sibling rivalry is natural and healthy, just don't let it get out of hand.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"29880637","body":"you shouldn't start off your intro with a question make it more of a statement.","dateCreated":"1289309996","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"castaneda.A","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/castaneda.A","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"29880889","body":"i like the sentences that say: Most of the time it starts when a second child is born into the family an all the thunder is stolen from the eldest child. Which forces the eldest to get into a mind set that they have to fight for their rightful spot that they once owned","dateCreated":"1289310242","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"albavera.y","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/albavera.y","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"29869073","dateCreated":"1289275148","smartDate":"Nov 8, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"castaneda.A","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/castaneda.A","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/willysroom.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/29869073"},"dateDigested":1532173569,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"no more swearing","description":"Profane language is used to express how you feel, however, teenagers today are using swears more and more frequently as a way to communicate with each other. If we keep swearing as a way to talk with our friends, then adults will think that\u2019s just the way adolescents talk in general. Adults wouldn\u2019t take us seriously and it could affect us in the long run if we can\u2019t even stop ourselves now from swearing. In school we use swearing every second of the day whether it\u2019s saying hello or just trying to have a conversation with the other person we are talking to. Profanity today has become part of society that shouldn't be used as a form of communication but as a form of emotion.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"29880651","body":"in the first sentence, get rid of the second "more" and just use ".. are using swears more frequently..".
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\nMaybe you can state that children hear swears at a young age and if they grew up listening to their parents swear all the time.","dateCreated":"1289310006","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"arapidisS","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/arapidisS","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"29880961","body":"You can talk about the emotions that go with swearing...
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\nAnd how kids feel after swearing.","dateCreated":"1289310309","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"KatelynMills","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/KatelynMills","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"29867967","dateCreated":"1289273462","smartDate":"Nov 8, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"messinaa5","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/messinaa5","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1297953109\/messinaa5-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/willysroom.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/29867967"},"dateDigested":1532173570,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Me, Myself, and I","description":" Today the world seems to be about three things; me, myself, and I. People have so much greed and selfishness today that our world won\u2019t get to see that new invention or that much needed cure for a debilitating disease. Instead, college students coming out of the top schools are going into Wall Street because they believe that is the path to becoming rich. Wall Street is paying them a lot of money to come up with the next idea to scam people out of their money and working them harder for longer hours and less pay. People today think if it\u2019s not helping me why do it if I\u2019m not going to make a profit? Your grandpa probably told you about a guy named Jonas Salk. Salk invented the cure for Polio in 1955 which was a very big issue. There were 58,000 cases reported just that year. 3,145 people died and 21,269 were left with mild to disabling paralysis. That wasn\u2019t the biggest thing Salk did though. It\u2019s what he didn\u2019t do that is so striking. Salk didn\u2019t patent the vaccine because he believed that the vaccine belonged to everyone and that he shouldn\u2019t make a profit on something that should belong to everyone. In an interview, Edward R. Murrow asked Jonas Salk, \u201cWho owns the patent on this vaccine?\u201d Salk simply replied, \u201cWell, the people, I would say. There is no patent. Could you patent the sun?\u201d In 1955 America had its vaccine. Jonas Salk could have asked for anything in the world as payment. He asked for nothing. Imagine if someone discovered something equally great in today\u2019s world and asked for nothing in return when, in fact, great profit could be gained. He or she would likely be considered \u2018crazy\u2019 or mentally unstable.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"29880819","body":"goood, maybe make your thesis more known.","dateCreated":"1289310175","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"lindahlk022","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/lindahlk022","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1289397770\/lindahlk022-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"29881549","body":"this could be split up into 2 paragraphs right before your grampa probably told you, this is a great connection to a real life situation.","dateCreated":"1289310860","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"Serranoo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Serranoo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1288834578\/Serranoo-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"29882341","body":"perhaps change sentence 9 to read like this "Salk didn\u2019t patent the vaccine because he believed that the vaccine belonged to everyone and that he shouldn\u2019t make a profit on something that belongs to the world." avoids useing everyone twice. also combine sentences 7 and 8","dateCreated":"1289311556","smartDate":"Nov 9, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"iandjohnson","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/iandjohnson","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1288788677\/iandjohnson-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}